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It was an anatomical deviation
for which I sought condemnation;
an incidental cognitive martyrdom
by learned capitulation.
Brains bound tightly by bridge,
a nexus strung from rope and plaster,
above a sinuous chasm
swimming with imps and neurotransmitters.
From dreams I count my sleep,
exhausted upon waking—
subconscious stipulation
to this lucid accusation.
Passion dulls the cerebral caucus
leaking from my eyes and fingers.
It tastes metallic,
self-damnation.
for which I sought condemnation;
an incidental cognitive martyrdom
by learned capitulation.
Brains bound tightly by bridge,
a nexus strung from rope and plaster,
above a sinuous chasm
swimming with imps and neurotransmitters.
From dreams I count my sleep,
exhausted upon waking—
subconscious stipulation
to this lucid accusation.
Passion dulls the cerebral caucus
leaking from my eyes and fingers.
It tastes metallic,
self-damnation.
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I'm really looking for critique on the availability of the meaning. I've gotten responses that it's unclear or diluted by the length of the words. Someone once told me it was pedantic. Any comments on this would be extremely helpful!
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I like this poem. It makes me want to paint. I relate to it because I work in neuroscience research and I understand the terminology used. I am not a writer so I can't critique but I can say that I enjoyed it.